I am learning to add detail in my writing.
04/04/17
On Saturday morning my team Tautoro Titans and I played rugby in Okaihau. First we got warmed up.
Next we had a bit of play against each other. Then we played against Okaihau. It was super because I liked the tackling.
After that we played against Kerikeri. We had a bit of a game then it was half time. Later we went back on the field. I was sweating because I was trying my best and running fast. It was a hard game because they were fast. Finally I went off side because I was tired.
I like playing tackle rugby better than rippa rugby because you get to tackle. I like tackling.
Hi Armani,
ReplyDeleteyou have written an impressive recount. I think you successfully added detail. This helps me to see a 'movie in my head' about your game. I like the part you added the detail about sweating and playing your hardest. Keep adding detail, you are learning so much! Next step, coming up with an interesting title for your blog post.