Recount writing

WALT use strategies to spice up our writing like show don't tell
The mud run

06.08.18

On a hot sunny Sunday me and all of my brothers did a mud run
at Ohaeawai. All of the Ohaeawai School kids were there.
There were under sevens up to under 12. I was in under 9.
This lady put my number on me. My number was 9 Then it was
the under nine’s turn i was excited to run then  girl said are you
ready I said yes then she said go and then all of us went as fast
as lightning. But some people were behind us. This boy was up
to me and my two friends. He was as fast as a horse. Then
there was hay that you could jump over. I jumped off the hay.
And I went as high as a bird. Then it was getting cold.
My mouth was going like brrrrr brrrrr. There was heaps of mud
and it was fun in the mud I tripped over because there were
heaps of rocks rocks under the mud it was hard as it was as
hard as turtles shell and then we got past the mud hole then
there was a big hill it was as big as a mountain I said I give up
but I tried my best my leg were dead but i saw the finished line
and i spirinted but my two friends over took me and they
finished and so that meant I came third I was proud of myself
 because I did it but i was covered in mud I was pitch black