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Monday, August 13, 2018

Recount writing

WALT use strategies to spice up our writing like show don't tell
The mud run
06.08.18

On a hot sunny Sunday me and all of my brothers did a mud run
at Ohaeawai. All of the Ohaeawai School kids were there.
There were under sevens up to under 12. I was in under 9.
This lady put my number on me. My number was 9 Then it was
the under nine’s turn i was excited to run then  girl said are you
ready I said yes then she said go and then all of us went as fast
as lightning. But some people were behind us. This boy was up
to me and my two friends. He was as fast as a horse. Then
there was hay that you could jump over. I jumped off the hay.
And I went as high as a bird. Then it was getting cold.
My mouth was going like brrrrr brrrrr. There was heaps of mud
and it was fun in the mud I tripped over because there were
heaps of rocks rocks under the mud it was hard as it was as
hard as turtles shell and then we got past the mud hole then
there was a big hill it was as big as a mountain I said I give up
but I tried my best my leg were dead but i saw the finished line
and i spirinted but my two friends over took me and they
finished and so that meant I came third I was proud of myself
 because I did it but i was covered in mud I was pitch black

Friday, July 27, 2018

Recount Writing-At the beach.

WALT use strategies to SPICE UP our writing like show don't tell.
At the beach
25.07.18
On a hot sunny Saturday me and my nana and my two
uncles went to the park in Mangonui.
We wanted to get out of the house because
there was nothing to do.
So we went to the park.
As soon as we got to the park
me and my two uncles went to the swings.
I said, “Should we see who will go the highest?”
I pushed off as fast as I could. I went higher and higher.
My hands were shaking, my heart was beating faster.
My knees felt like jelly. I felt scared.
I nearly went over the pole. It was like being on a trampoline.
I went so high that I won the game.

“Yay! I won! I shouted.
My uncles said, “Whoa you went high Armani.
You get 1 lolly  we promised you a lolly,Armani”
After that we went on to a spinny rolly thing.
I went on it. I asked my uncles to play on it with me.
They said, “Yes, OK.”  I said, “I’m going to win again.”
We got on it.
They were a bit faster than me so they were better than me.
But I was more balanced than them
so I nearly won but I didn't.
I was so close to winning though.
So I had to pay my uncle a lolly.
I really enjoyed my day. It was so fun. .