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At the pools
On Saturday I went to the pools in Whangarei with my whole family.
When we got there I got into my swimming togs.
Next we went into the pools. It was cold as ice. I did a bomb and my brother Josh gave me a fright when I came up out of the pool. He tried to jump on me but missed me and he splashed me all over with water. He laughed at me.
I laughed too. I had great fun.
After that it was lunch time. We had egg sandwiches. It was yum and then we had a drink.
After lunch we went in the spa pool at the Whangarei pools. It was warm. Me and my three brothers and my mum and dad got hot. Then we went into the cold pool for 10 minutes. Later on my dad said it was home time.
Then we had a shower and my mum changed baby Kaharau’s nappy. She put baby Kaharau in the shower with my dad. All of us jumped out of the shower and then my mum had a shower. Kaharau was hungry so my mum jumped out of the shower and gave Kaharau a kai.
That was the end of our amazing day at the Whangarei wave pools. We were all tired but we enjoyed our day.
Hi Marni,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your story about the pools. Because it sounds very exciting and you were confident with your time words. But Maybe next time you could try have an interesting title. Blog ya later.